EJ Pitch Review- Round 3

The Gamer's Gazette
Pros:

• Title slide: informative on all the needed levels
• Slide 9: nice collection of staff. Are they paid or volunteer?

Cons

• Background: smartly simple, but perhaps a bit too bland
• Slide 3: all good info, but too much for one slide. List the keys and say the rest during the pitch
•  Typos! Slide 4: if the news story is important enough. Slide 8: The Gamer’s Gazette is the only gaming news outlet.

Some of the wording confused me (annual volume on slide 10), but I'm sure this stems from my lack of knowledge of the video game world.

News in Comics
Pros:

• Background: I find it rather epic-looking.
• Images: love the color is adds!
• Audio: good intonation, clear, engaging.
• Slide 5: the wording is fabulous.
• Closing slide: clever and genuine, I like it.

Cons:

• Title slide: "comicly" is an intentional misspelling?
• Images: can't decide it it's a tad too busy.
• Font: a bit larger might be nice.
• Slide 9: Stick to one color for the text. Cohesive is helpful.
• Slide 10: wahh word heavy! List key sections then voice the rest or separate into two slides.

Overall I think this is a fabulous idea and you presented it very well. I would definitely be interested in seeing News in Comics.

Unblocked Writers
Pros:

• Title slide: nice colors and good graphic.
• Slide 5: realism towards website problems and your openness about them is wise.
• Slide 7: broad audience looks good to potential investors.

Cons:

• Slides 2, 3, 6, 10: looks bare. Try and alter/fill/balance the space better.
• Slide 4: while I think it's important to have a mission statement, I don't think devoting a slide to it is the best option. Try and incorporate the points of your mission statement into the overall pitch.
• Slide 8: too repetitive with text (variety of fields).

Your PP is very clean and simple, which is easy to follow.  It's good that you don't rely on the PP to speak for you and have plenty of material to speak about, but make sure you aren't so sparse on the PP that your audience lacks a visual aid.